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The Upsilon Sigmas: Part I by ~mandalorian55:iconmandalorian55:



          A deathstick was ignited in the dark. A man sat in the dark with the deathstick in his mouth. He could taste it. He could feel the chemicals rushing through his system, easing the blaster-bolt wound in the middle of his back.
          The burn ran deep. He would not live without medical help. But he’d been trained for this sort of thing. He could patch himself up in less than three minutes and be ready for action if he could.
          He couldn’t now because of the man who had shot him in the back.
          The dying man acknowledged his presence; the attacker watching on the platform just above the containers. A small trail of explosive residue led towards the containers containing Tibana gas. Igniting another deathstick, he threw it onto the residue, and watched as flame spat up and raced along the floor.
          Hell if I’m gonna die, this goon is too.
          He watched with bated breath, the deathstick and Tibana gas fumes filling his lungs.
          A few more meters, and we all die . . . don’t do anything, don’t . . .
          But the man above the platform stopped the flame as it sped toward the gas canisters, having the arrogance to piss on the flame to stop its advance: an insult to the injured man.
          Osik, thought the dying man. He couldn’t help but grin: his attempt to blow the canisters and them up was a last-ditch effort anyway: a poor one at that.
          The shadowy figure closed the front of its groin armor and began to descend down steps toward the dying man.
          The dying man looked up at his attacker. At the same time, his attacker lit its own deathstick with a gold igniter and lit its face for the dying man to see.
          No. That’s impossible . . . he was . . .
          At that point, the dying man couldn’t help but laugh. A dry, humorless chuckle that escaped from his throat. He laughed because of his attacker’s identity. It was a face that the dying man knew all too well. His attackers face was burned firmly in his memory.
          The attacker spoke, “How you doing, Keaton?”
          The dying man, Keaton, looked up, “I can’t feel my legs. Keyser.”
          The attacker, Keyser, took a Verpine Shatter Gun out from a holster at his right side.
          Keyser turned the igniter off, “Ready?”
          Keaton took a look at the Verpine Shatter Gun, knowing full well what happened next. Keaton had done it himself many times.
          “What time is it?”
          Keyser lifted his left arm and looked at a gold chrono, “Twenty-four hundred-thirty.”
          With that Keyser exchanged the gun from right to left hand, aimed at Keaton, and shot Keaton twice in the head without remorse; a full second between each shot.
          Keyser turned, donning the helmet that had been hanging from his utility belt. As he did this, he dropped his deathstick back onto the trail of explosive residue, making for the exit hatch at a leisurely pace. By the time Keyser had walked off the carrier ship, the ship had already exploded in the forward compartment and now flame was traveling down corridors towards the engine room. Keyser was already out of the building and into a speeder loaded with ninety-one million credits, flying off into the night of Nar Shadaa. Behind him in the distance, he could hear the klaxons and sirens of the Nar Shadaa Security Force rapidly approaching the docking bay: but they wouldn’t catch him.
©2008-2009 ~mandalorian55
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Author's Comments

READ FIRST PLEASE:

For those of you who recognize it, this story mirrors the great film "The Usual Suspects" because it is.

The idea came to me when I compared the fellows, Hockney, McManus, Fenster, Keaton and Verbal to Clone Commandos, each guy having armor like the ones on the game "Republic Commando", for instance, Keaton was the leader, so therefore he'd have armor like Boss. Hockney is the explosive expert, so he had Demolitions armor. As the story goes on, you'll see more.

So basically I've taken the Usual Suspects, and put it into the Star Wars universe.

I am fully aware that none of this is my own material. Absolutely none. These are all other peoples ideas.

"The Usual Suspects" was written by Christopher McQuarrie, directed by Bryan Singer, and produced by Michael McDonnell and Bryan Singer.

It is distributed by PolyGram Filmed Entertainment in the UK, Gramercy Pictures in the US, and Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer worldwide.

It is copyright Rosco Film GMBH and Bad Hat Harry Productions.

Likewise everything Star Wars is copyright Lucasarts Entertainment.

All characters and plot are based off of characters from "The Usual Suspects", while everything else belongs to the Star Wars Universe.

The only part of this story that is my idea is the idea to blend the two stories together.

I would love feedback! Tell me whether this idea is stupid or cool, whether I should pursue the idea or not, and most importantly, whether I am infringing heavily on copyright, and if I am whether it would be better to quit altogether, or just add the person I didn't mention to the list of who proper credit belongs to.

Also any spelling, grammatical or writing errors I have made should be pointed out, by all means.

Thanks for viewing! And don't ruin the ending for those who haven't seen!

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:icondonreaper:
interesting, im interested to see hows is works out

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:iconkuk-man:
Very cool concept. Keep going, I want to imagine what these guys will "look" like as Clone Commandos.

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